Needs Rewrite

Author: signed, poet

*Larissa stops reading* L: Jack, what is this crap? J: You said you wanted to see more desperation. L: These two characters already have a child together. Here it sounds like they've only just met. J: The marriage thing... is meant for you. I'm asking you to marry me. L. I don't understand. J: That's such a cliche response. Look, I mean it! I had to write it so you'd read it... so you believe me. L: You're so stupid and I'm not in the mood. J: And I'm completely serious. L: But we've only known each other 3 months! J: I heard a song in the car, you see, it just means me and you. We - it has to be WE. I love you! Don't you know that? Well, I do. L: Stop it this instant. I now realize you're not joking, which is unfortunate. I'm going to fire you if you don't stop immediately. J: Why are you being this way? I started working for you in the winter. Now, it's Spring. Also, I know you're pregnant... L: I'm NOT. Cassie IS. And YOU have exactly 12 hours to rewrite this scene. Grow up, rewrite, and then apologize.

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